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samiyusuf bestfan
04-15-2006, 06:17 PM
salam to my dears sizsters & brothers hre
this my new poem actually i wrote three ones my sad moon ; freindship ; once again
in this moment you are going to read freindship & i hope realy that you wil lie it inshallah :p any way
Every one want
to have lot of friends
Every one is dreaming
of good and real ones
Friends which they
can make your nice
After it was without colors
and cold as the ice
But which kind of
them do you have

Is your friend :
From those who help you
to solve your problems
And those who share with you
pain in your troubles

Or is he :
From those who stay
with you in your happiness
And after that leave you
in your worst days & sadness

A friend is that who
send for you daily letters
& remember you even there
is between you & him a big distance
He is that one who send you messages
& tell you that in his life
you have great importance

For me a real friend is that
who say to you :
The only wealth I have
are the poeple around me
That I really call friends
and you are one of them
Please stay with me
So that poeple will know
how rich I am

Those are my lovely
sweet and near friends
Who really diserve
to be called real ones

French :

Les vrais amis pour moi
(the true friends for me)
sont qui vous disent toujours :
(are those who always tell you :)
Je te souhaite une journée sucrée
(I wish for you a sweet day)
Enrobée de chocolat napée
( wraped with chocolate )
De caramel avec quelques fruits confits
(with caramel mixed with some preserved fruits)
Pour relever la saveur de la vie
(To raise again the taste of life)

A tous mes amis je dis :
(to all my friends I say :)
Dans l’infini de l’univers
(In this infinite world )
Dans les profondeurs de la mer
(in the deepness of sea )
Demain aujourd’hui et hier
(tomorrow today and yesterday )
Je l’avais découvert
( i have discovered )
Que vous êtes des amis supers
( that you are great friends)
Et que vous êtes les meilleurs
( and that you are the best ones)

enjoy it & please if it is not good tell me cause i wil say always that my english is not good but inshallah i will improve it amen
pray with me to be a good poet & that my poems will satisfate every one muslims or not
& that allah help me to use always this talante if i can call it for the good of islam & muslims

dalia Ibrahim ziada
04-18-2006, 04:51 PM
Dear sis SaMIYUSUF BESTFAN. thank you for your nice words and let me thank Almighty Allah for having a poet with an AMAZING TALENT among us here.
However, let me criticize this poem.:rolleyes: ;) I hope you won't object this. You can see that the meanings you have mentioned in your poem is more than great. Yet, I can feel that there is something wrong with the rhythm.

Waiting for more creative poets and participations :)